Comment on At the Water’s Edge – Chapter Three by tonilea.
Your writing style is very readable. I am enjoying the story very much. I did notice a couple small mistakes. Once you called the main character KathArine but usually you call her KathErine. In that same paragraph there is an unnecessary comma. (I am often accused of overworking the comma myself so I noticed it.) Also, close to the end she picks up her carry and goes to the pub. I think it would be better to say carry on as the reference is the bag she had on the plane. I am not trying to be a know it all, but I think you are wanting helpful feedback. I do love the story and am eager for the next chapter.
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